Narrative writing

So far for our narrative writing this is what I have done. I'm still on my problem area since we haven't been doing much writing since we have been busy with tests. Stay tuned for more of the story.

Ashleigh’s lungs had started filling up with water, she couldn’t breath at all. She quickly swam up when she realised that she didn’t knowhow to swim. She looked at gary for help and he gave her some sea kelp. Sea kelp can help you breath underwater for just a few hours. She thanked Gary and started learning how to swim again. Aries, who was outside the door came in to see a humanised ashleigh swimming around. “Ashleigh! What did you do? I need to tell your father about this, he won’t be happy” ,Aries had said. Ashleigh quickly grabbed Aries and told her not to say anything. “I’m just gonna go out for ten minutes, i’ll even bring you something if you just say quiet” ,Ashleigh had pleaded. Aries slowly nodded and made a dash for the door. Ashleigh thought that she was going home to sleep since it was getting dark.

Ashleigh had quickly started swimming above the water and onto the coast where no one was. She quickly started walking, to Ashleigh walking was like taking your first swim as a little merchild. She slowly learnt how to walk and went into the town, as she arrived into the town she saw a boy who looked no older than fifteen come towards her. “Hello miss, I haven’t seen you around here before. You new arounds these parts?” The stranger had asked. She nodded and he started to speak again “Well it’s always good to see new people around here, not many people come here because they think merfolk live here and that we are all merfolk. I’m Freddie Meriez, the mayor of Klenzville”. Ashleigh smiled “ And I’m Ashleigh merl- err Mealand.”