The Lion King Remake, The Giraffe Kings

The giraffe was up on a tree, It was slowly slipping as lions nipped at its tail, teasing the poor animal. Suddenly the giraffe had fallen, right into a lion's mouth, its neck torn apart from the multiple sharp knives clawing at his body. “Long live the king!” the lions roared, you could see Girafasa, the now dead giraffe’s looking for his child, Gimba. Alas, you could see Gimba watching him being eaten. Suddenly the title of the movie came up and everyone was piling out of the movie theatres. I was in tears because of the build up towards a giraffe’s death. I started wondering if gimba was supposed to be king, after all the best remake of The Lion king had just came out. I walked out of the pitch black room and towards my friends, who were standing near a bench that was painted a rusty black. They were also teary eyed, discussing how good the movie was. After the live action version of the lion king, Disney made three more spin-offs of the movie and changed the animals, endings and plot. There was the Monkey Leader, The Hippo Mother and Giraffe King. By far Giraffe king was the best. We had all walked out of the rundown movie theatres and piled into Carson, my friends car. It was around two in the morning when I had passed out by exhaustion. All I Was dreaming about was different endings for the movie, thinking that Girafasa was still alive and gimba was happy.

The Water Cycle

How The Water Cycle Works.

When it rains, snows or hails it has a complicated cycle to make it rain or snow. It is called the water cycle, It contains three different elements to make it rain. The three elements are evaporation, condensation and precipitation.

Evaporation

Evaporation starts with the sun, when water is visible to water it slowly burns the water into water vapor, water vapor is a gas that is basically just water. When you cook something there is steam that rises up, thats water vapor.

Condensation

Condensation comes and takes the water up to the clouds. It takes the vapour to the clouds and cools it down. It stores the now cooled water until precipitation comes. As the water is cooling it can turn into hail and snow as it is cooling because the air near the clouds in below 0℃ .

Precipitation

Precipitation takes over condensation and is slowly turning the water into rain, snow, sleet or hail. The water then gets bigger until it turns into a reasonable size to fall down and hit the ground. The oceans, lakes and rivers all collect the water so then the water cycle repeats.

That is how the water cycle is formed. The cycle is much more complicated with many more theories on how it is actually formed but this is what scientists have come up with. There are many more possibilities that that is only a tiny part of the cycle but we might never know the real reason on the water cycle.

• Something that I did well: Finishing it on time
• Something I can improve for next time: Writing Scientifically
• Something that I need more help with: Putting the scientific words in the right places

My Recount

This year on new years day my sister Anisha, my dad, my aunty and I went to Sydney to go on a cruise. At first it was just my dad and aunty who were going but I managed to beg my dad to let me and my sister go as my sister had just graduated. We wanted to have a good time and also relax from things that had happened last year.

The day we left I was really excited because it would be my first time on a cruise and I got to spend it with my sister who really didn’t have that much time to go anywhere. Then we left and arrived for the airport to board the plane to Sydney. As we were walking I had asked what plane we were going on, My sister had told me that we were going on Emirates. I fistbumped the air because I knew I was going to get food and it was going to be good. After we had dropped our luggage we waited 30 minutes to be able to board the plane. Once we were able to board the plane I had gotten hungry and started eating mints that were in my travel bag that I always pack when I’m going somewhere.  When I was on the plane I was given Pasta with bits of chicken inside of it. I also had this delicious cheesecake that had black forest flavouring sauce.

Once we had Arrived we waited for my aunty who was on another plane since she lived in Somewhere else than us, she then arrived and we went to the hotel we were staying in. We were given red wine and Sparkling Apple Juice which tasted really good.

After two days it was wednesday, the day to board the cruise. I was feeling gloomy as we arrived but when I saw the cruise I instantly brightened up and couldn’t wait to go inside. After getting our room keys and giving our luggage to security so they can put it in our room we finally entered the Cruise and took a photo. When we fully entered the cruise I had said “Whoa, This place is a mansion in disguise! How did we find this company!?” I was really surprised that when we entered that there was a bar, green and purple party lights. It looked like a party instead of a cruise lobby.

After two hours we had gone outside to the top floor and watched the boat depart from the Sydney docks, I was a little seasick so my auntie gave me tablets to stop me from feeling seasick. The country we were going to was called New Caledonia and we were going to a city called Noumea. It took five days to get from Sydney to Noumea so we explored the boat and relaxed while waiting. When we arrived it was quite boring, everyone spoke in french and no one spoke english or knew parts. They were very loud. After an hour we went back onto the cruise and changed into nicer clothes.

After four thirty the cruise left and we were going to fiji. It took 3 days to arrive in Suva but it was extremely hot. We went to my aunties house and ate crab curry which was quite spicy but it was really tasty. We then went to buy some clothes and get my sister a nose pierce which was really pretty, it was gold and had a single crystal on it. We then bought these island dresses for our island themed dinner. We then went back into the boat and then then traveled to Lautoka. We had my uncle over there so they came to pick us up. I then saw my cousins Hinal, Krishnal and Kartik. It was fun seeing them because Hinal had just gotten married recently and I had been there. My sister hadn’t been in Fiji for seven years so it was nice seeing them.

We then went back onto the cruise and traveled to Tonga. On the cruise one night there was a british celebration which had ‘guards’ which were just entertainment people who did it for fun. We arrived at Tonga and we left and explored, we saw a cliff that a young girl died in. it was really sad to know that someone had died but it had an amazing view. Soon it was time to go home and I was getting hungry. As I was looking around I looked into the water and had seen a snake. I had quickly told my sister and she had gotten scared. I laughed at her and then we had gone back onto the cruise.

We had departed from Tonga and arrived into Auckland. I was really sad that the cruise had ended but I was happy that I was able to go on a cruise for the first time. I would love to do it again because it felt like a dream to actually be on the sea. I can’t wait to go on another cruise.

My Space Adventure (Final draft)

Final draft

My Space Adventure

1961 was the time that I was a young beautiful animal, it was the best time to be alive  in earth, or so I was told. I could hear mumbling while I was uncomfortably lying on a surgens’ table. I was used as a test subject my whole life. I was just playing in my room when my trainer Jake gave me food, I was confused that he was giving me food before lunch time. I didn’t care because I was already hungry so I ate it, the last thing I remembered was feeling dizzy and falling asleep while Jake was caring me to his job. I was feeling quiet disappointed because I was being used. Being a chimp is really cruel. I remembered when I first saw Jake, he was looking at me with his diamond blue eyes while talking to the zoo keeper. That day I felt loved for the first time. Yes I’m a chimp, an intelligent, funny looking, 3 year old chimp who’s name is Zach. Don’t ask. Now I’m stuck to a table, about to wear a astronaut suit and get sent into space alone and confused. I was meant to wake up five minutes ago but I wanted them to think I was dead. It didn’t work at all. They had a needle, my weakness. I started to open my eyes and look everywhere. I was knocked out with a metal bar. (Why?)

I was starting to feel betrayed by Jake, he used me as a toy for money. I woke up in a chair, tied up with a seatbelt and in a spaceship. I wish this was a human instead of me. My heart was beating like I had just woken up from an endless nightmare alone. This is the end of my life. I felt like a toy that a baby left in a daycare alone and forgotten. I knew what they wanted from me, they wanted to see how a monkey would age in space. I was snapped out of my thoughts by loud screams of people saying things like ‘Will this chimp survive’ and ‘ This is one unlucky chimp we have’.”5, 4, 3, 2, 1 Blast off!”. I was meant to stay in space for 5 years, But for all I know is I’m going to be staying in space for approximately 65 years. Yeah I’m pretty smart for a chimp. I heard a voice through the crackling radio. I was rumbling side to side, my chair was rocking uncontrollably while I was sweating like no tomorrow. “Say goodbye to earth Zach and say hello to space.” I heard a familiar voice from the radio, Jake!  The last thing I had of home was a photo of me and Jake. I remember that Jack had injected something into me, I think it was sleeping serum. The last thing I remember is flying to the earth’s atmosphere and falling into a endless coma of black ...

65 Years later…

I woke up from my endless death like coma to a beeping noise around me, Where am I?, why am I here?. I had a blank moment of where I was, Then I remembered that I was in space. I looked at the years, months, days, hours and minutes I had stayed here in space.  It's now 2026 I thought I was meant to stay here in this hellhole capsule for 5 years… this is what I get for being in a coma. At Least I was right on being in a coma for 65 years. I looked into the control panel and looked at a terrifying figure that I assumed was me. What happened to me? Why do I look so old? I had a grey wispy moustache, a grey stubble, some wrinkles near my head and nose and I also had weak bones so I couldn’t move at all, apart from my hands.

I looked at the control panel again and pressed the communication button...... nothing. I was stuck in space forever. This is how I wanted to die, In space. I was slowly floating in my space capsule around a moon like planet when a bright light flashed before me. It was a beautiful sight to look at. I realised it was the milky way when I saw a wave of blue, magenta, purple, pink, navy blue, white and baby blue. I was starstruck….. Then it hit me, I could die here alone with no family.  I didn’t want to shed a tear it was forbidden now , I was very good with hiding my emotions. There was another bright light that was burning my eyelids while I was looking at the stars. The light had gone and before me was my home….. Earth! I looked at the Earth and all it's glory. I could see the thickness of the Earth's atmosphere. I calculated if I could make it with the amount of fuel. I could make it but it would be a rough landing. I was ready for anything and it was now or never. I used up all of my  unused fuel and fell into the earth's atmosphere. I felt like I had needles slowly poking into my weak body over and over again. I was rumbling side to side which hurt me alot, but I didn’t mind. I could see the parachutes flop up from their despencer for safe landing….. And boy did it hurt when landing. I looked out the window to see land….. I mentally high fived myself for the landing.

I looked at myself again then saw that the seat belt was loose, I must've lost a lot of weight while in that coma. I saw the photo and took it with me. The space suit was very tight. I slowly unbuckled the belt and painfully got out of the space capsule.

I looked at the place in front of me that I once called home. A tear ran down my face.  The once fully leaved trees were now naked sticks on the land, The once groomed  ground was now dusty burnt ground. The buildings were shattered like glass that broke. A once beautiful world now looks like a discarded wasteland.

There was no use of calling anybody since there was no civilization around me. But I did it anyway “Hello! Anybody! Help me!” I screamed. Since I didn’t know how to speak human it came out as weird noises. Nothing. It was hopeless to scream out for anybody since everybody was gone.

I was startled by a rumbling noise in front of me. I looked around for the owner of that noise. I looked down and saw that I was the owner. My stomach was roaring for food while my throat was dry from the lack of water and nutrition I got. I helplessly sighed…. What am I supposed to do now? As I was thinking I saw a building that was the most homely. I felt like worshiping the building right in front of me, and I did that. I was very, very stupid chimp today.

When I knelt down my fragile body fell on the floor face first.(As I had expected) My bones felt like sticks being crushed and broken. I was silent for a few seconds until the pain rushed through my fragile body. I screamed in agony as the pain rushed through my whole body.

Suddenly I felt movement near me.

“Help me please!” I cried.

The moving object thing came towards me with a Shank. A-a human.

“Ooh something to eat finally!” The human said. I knew what was happening

“Please don’t do this!” I screamed before I was cut into half, the last thing I remembered of the world was… Jake and the photo. I started tearing up at my ending life. I took the photo out of my pocket and slowly looked at it. It brought a smile to my face. “Thank you Jake, for everything that you’ve done for me.” Was the last thing I had whispered before I descended into the world of darkness.

My space Adventure (first draft)

This term for the past 5 weeks in writing we have been writing a narrrative. The narrative was about a Chimp that was sent into space, So far this is my story. I hope you like my narrative that I wrote. This is also my first draft. Byee!

W.A.L.T write a narrative

Success Criteria

I know I will be successful when….

• The title is suitable for the text.

• The orientation tells who the story is about, and when and where the story happened.
• The complication describes a problem and explains what happened next.
• The resolution explains how the problem was solved.
• Seeks feedback and makes changes to texts to improve clarity and meaning.

First draft

My Space Adventure

1961 was the time that I was a young beautiful animal, it was the best time to be alive  in earth, or so I was told. I could hear mumbling while I was uncomfortably lying on a surgen table. I was used as a test subject my whole life. I was just playing in my room when my trainer Jake gave me food, I was confused that he was giving me food before lunch time. I didn’t care because I was already hungry so I ate it, the last thing I remembered was feeling dizzy and falling asleep while Jake was caring me to his job. I was feeling quiet disappointed because I was being used. Being a chimp is really cruel. I remembered when I first saw Jake, he was looking at me with his diamond blue eyes while talking to the zoo keeper. That day I felt loved for the first time. Yes I’m a chimp, an intelligent, funny looking, 3 year old chimp. Don’t ask. Now I’m stuck to a table, about to wear a astronaut suit and get sent into space alone and confused. I was meant to wake up five minutes ago but I wanted them to think I was dead. It didn’t work at all. They had a needle, my weakness. I started to open my eyes and look everywhere. I was knocked out with a metal bar.

I was starting to feel betrayed by Jake, he used me as a toy for money. I woke up in a chair, tied up with a seatbelt and in a spaceship. I wish this was a human instead of me. My heart was beating like I had just woken up from an endless nightmare alone. This is the end of my life. I felt like a toy that a baby left in a daycare alone and forgotten. I knew what they wanted from me, they wanted to see how a monkey would age in space. I was snapped out of my thoughts by loud screams of people saying things like ‘Will this chimp survive’ and ‘ This is one unlucky chimp we have’.”5, 4, 3, 2, 1 Blast off!”. I was meant to stay in space for 5 years, But for all I know is i’m going to be staying in space for approximately 65 years. Yeah i’m pretty smart for a chimp. I heard a voice through the crackling radio. I was rumbling side to side, my chair was rocking uncontrollably while I was sweating like no tomorrow. “Say goodbye to earth Zach and say hello to space.” I heard a familiar voice from the radio, Jake!  The last thing I had of home was a photo of me and Jake. I remember that Jack had injected something into me, I think it was sleeping serum. The last thing I remember is flying to the earth’s atmosphere and falling into a endless coma of black ...

65 Years later…

I woke up from my endless death like coma to a beeping noise around me, Where am I, why am I here. I had a blank moment of where I was, Then I remembered that I was in space.I looked at the years, months, days, hours and minutes I had stayed here in space.  It's now 2026 I thought I was meant to stay here in this hellhole capsule for 5 years… this is what I get for being in a coma. At Least I was right on being in a coma for 65 years. I looked into the control panel and looked at a terrifying figure that I assumed was me What happened to me!? Why do I look so old? I had a grey wispy moustache, a grey stubble, some wrinkles near my head and nose and I also had weak bones so I couldn’t move at all, apart from my hands.

I looked at the control panel again and pressed the communication button...... nothing. I was stuck in space forever. This is how I wanted to die, In space. I was slowly floating in my space capsule around a moon like planet when a bright light flashed before me. It was a beautiful sight to look at. I realised it was the milky way when I saw a wave of blue, magenta, purple, pink, navy blue, white and baby blue. I was starstruck….. Then it hit me, I could die here alone with no family.  I didn’t want to shed a tear it was forbidden now , I was very good with hiding my emotions. There was another bright light that was burning my eyelids while I was looking at the stars. The light had gone and before me was my home….. Earth! I looked at the Earth and all it's glory. I could see the thickness of the Earth's atmosphere. I calculated if I could make it with the amount of fuel.. I could make it but it would be a rough landing. I was ready for anything and it was now or never. I used up all of my  unused fuel and fell into the earth's atmosphere. I felt like I had needles slowly poking into my weak body over and over again. I was rumbling side to side which hurt me alot, but I didn’t mind. I could see the parachutes flop up from their despencer for safe landing….. And boy did it hurt when landing. I looked out the window to see land….. I mentally high fived myself for the landing.

I looked at myself again then saw that the seat belt was loose, I must've lost a lot of weight while in that coma. I saw the photo and took it with me. The space suit was very tight. I slowly unbuckled the belt and painfully got out of the space capsule.

I looked at the place in front of me that I once called home. A tear ran down my face.  The once fully leaved trees were now naked sticks on the land, The once groomed  ground was now dusty burnt ground. The buildings were shattered like glass that broke. A once beautiful world now looks like a discarded wasteland

There was no use of calling anybody since there was no civilization around me. But I did it anyway “Hello! Anybody! Help me!” I screamed. Since I didn’t know how to speak human it came out as weird noises. Nothing. It was hopeless to scream out for anybody since everybody was gone.

I was startled by a rumbling noise in front of me. I looked around for the owner of that noise. I looked down and saw that I was the owner. My stomach was roaring for food while my throat was dry from the lack of water and nutrition I got. I helplessly sighed…. What am I supposed to do now? As I was thinking I saw a building that was the most homely. I felt like worshiping the building right in front of me, and I did that. I was very, very stupid chimp today.

When I knelt down my fragile body fell on the floor face first. My bones felt like sticks being crushed and broken. I was silent for a few seconds until the pain rushed through my fragile body. I screamed in agony as the pain rushed through my whole body.

Suddenly I felt movement near me.

“Help me please!” I cried.

The moving object thing came towards me with a shank. A-a human.

“Ooh something to eat finally!” The human said. I knew what was happening

“Please don’t do this!” I screamed before I was cut into half, the last thing I remembered of the world was… jake and the photo. I took the photo out of my pocket and looked at it. It brought a smile to my face. “Thank you Jake, for everything that you’ve done for me.” Was the last thing I had whispered before I descended into the world of darkness.

And thats my first draft. Thanks for looking at my story!

My Mid-Year learning goals

These are my learning goals for 2016. It shows you my goals that I have achieved and are going to achieve. I am showing this to my parents at my learning conference.

Food fight of the day.

 W.A.L.T recall  events through the eyes of an animal.

Success Criteria

I know I will be successful when my recount has a

• Title
• Orientation:  When? Who? Where? Why?
• Sequence of events:  What happened? Describe using the senses (hear, taste, see, smell and feel).
• Personal Comment:  How did the events make you feel?

The red Sentences are the improvements I made

Second Draft

Food Fight of the day

Today was a typical Monday sunny afternoon, me and my parents, who are buffaloes were just going for a walk in the dry grassland of the African Savannah. We were just looking for food because I was hungry.  We were walking peacefully looking around the river bank until my dad told me and my mom to stay put, we asked him why and he said ‘I think we're being targeted right now’.

As my dad was looking for something, I could see a lion's head.  I thought I was hallucinating but I wasn’t!  I saw my dad’s eyes grow ‘Lions, run!’ he shouted.  I could hear faint screeching noises of the lions telling them to chase after us.  I could smell danger lying ahead.  My parents ran without me by their side thinking I was.  As soon as I ran I could see the lions chasing one thing, ME!

I wasn’t as slow as my parents so I was pretty fast for a calf.  I could see desire in their eyes as they chased me, licking their long looking filthy tongues at my rich juicy meat.  Wham! I got knocked into the river I was beside.

I tasted something I never tasted before, blood! I felt like a chicken running away from death.  Swimming up I could feel 2 fluffy and soft hands helping me up, I thought it was my parents, but no it was two lion’s trying to eat me alive!  I could feel a pull on my leg.  I became quiet.  I thought this animal wasn't allowed in the savannas because of what he did to my brother, Jack.  I Looked behind me and saw who it was, it was the animal who killed my brother, A CROCODILE!!  I started struggling to get out of the grip of these predators but I couldn’t.  I felt like a chew toy being pulled by two dogs playing tug-o-war. Finally the lions pulled me out of the water and brought me to their territory, trying to kill me.

I could hear loud stomping feet coming towards me. I knew who it was, My HERD!!  I called out to them and they came running towards me, as they came towards me the lions slowly backed away from me knowing that they lost the battle.  My parents stopped and looked at the lions as they slowly backed away from me and the herd.  My uncle Colton charged at one of the lions and hit it sending it flying 5 feet into the air, Then into the river with the crocodile that had attacked me earlier.  The other lions ran away from me with my family chasing them. I returned to my parents smiling happily.

As I walked back to my parents I felt joy and relief that I was alive, I had a few scratches but other than that I was fine.  I remembered the look on the lions as they saw my parents heard coming up to them, coming to get me back. I smiled at that thought. I had learned my lesson, never go into the wild areas of the savanna as a calf.

Food Fight Of The Day.

W.A.L.T recall  events through the eyes of an animal.

Success Criteria

I know I will be successful when my recount has a

• Title
• Orientation:  When? Who? Where? Why?
• Sequence of events:  What happened? Describe using the senses (hear, taste, see, smell and feel).
• Personal Comment:  How did the events make you feel?

First Draft

Food Fight of the day

Today was a typical monday sunny afternoon, me and my parents, who are buffalos were just going for a walk in the dry grassland of the savannah. We were just hunting for food because I was hungry. We were walking peacefully looking around the river banks until my dad told me and my mom to stay put, we asked him why and he said ‘Well I think we're being targeted right now’.  As my dad was looking for something. I could see a lion's head, I thought I was hallucinating but I wasn’t!  I saw my dad’s eyes grow, ‘Lions Run!’He shouted.

I could hear faint screeching noises of the lions telling them to chase after us. I could smell danger lying ahead.  My parents ran without me by their side thinking I was, but as soon as I ran I could see the lions chasing one thing, ME!  I wasn’t as fast as my parents so i was pretty slow for a calf. I could see desire in their eyes as they chased me, licking their long looking filthy tongues at my rich meat. Wham! I got knocked into the river I was next to. I tasted something I never tasted before, blood! I felt Like a chicken running away from death.  Swimming up I could feel 2 fluffy and soft  hands helping me up, I thought it was my parents, but no it was something that was going to be my nightmare for a while.  

As I walked back to my parents I felt joy and relieved that I was alive, I had a few scratches but other than that I was perfectly fine.  I remembered the look on the lions as they saw my parents heard coming up to them coming to get me back. I smiled at that thought. I had learned my lesson, never go into the wild areas of the savanna with a calf.

Battle at Kruger National Park Sequence.

W.A.L.T recall events in order.

Battle at Kruger National Park!

	The Buffalo herd  are walking down the dusty road of grass to find food, but what they don’t know is they are in the habitat of the mighty lions.
	A lion pride have spot the buffalo herd and are getting ready to to pounce on their prey.
	The pride are about to  but waiting for the right time to catch their prey.
	The buffalo herd have spotted the lion pride and are running as fast as they can, but the pride have other plans.
	The pride are about to catch their target, the buffalo calf!
	The pride have their prey, but along comes the crocodile, the food war begins!
	The buffalo has grabbed his whole herd and is coming to get the calf back!
	The lion pride are outnumbered and are very Anxious about what's about to happen.
	One buffalo is starting to ram into the pride to get the buffalo calf back, which ends up to the calf still alive with it's parents scared half to death.

Life For Women in WW1

W.A.L.T describe what life was like for men and women in WW1 through a diary entry.

29th May 1916

Everyday and every night has been tough. picking fruits, sewing clothes and working in factories is tough.  Everyday I miss my my dad and brother Shiva who are fighting for their lives, for our country.  At night I always imagine that Shiva and my dad are here safe and sound in bed, which helps me go to sleep.

Every dreadful morning I’m pretty anxious about the terrifying death telegraph for them both, which makes me very tense and empty in my heart.

My friends Millie, Julie, Jessica and Cadenza have also been great help at the farm.

Mum has barely came out of the house, which is understandable because of war and dad and Shiva gone.  Shiva has been sending letters to me which makes my day, knowing he’s ok still kicking with dad.

Yesterday I had found out that Cadenza’s Brother, Carlos has been injured and almost killed by gas, which is terrifying for her and her mother.

I have to go to bed now,  tomorrow i’m signing up as a nurse, I just hope mum can handle the farm alone, if not then my friends will help her like always.

By Trisha