- Yes they are
Key Ideas - The negative impact of phones on students
What must you achieve
(in this paragraph I am trying to show/prove/explain that)
- Students are negatively affected by cellphones
Information
(Key evidence/information you want to include)
- Why attracted
- Time spent on phones
- Effects that happen when overusing phones
Delufiy
(best paragraph structure to convey this is)
- Lawyer paragraph
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Cellphones have negative effects on students. This matters because it can affect their mental states while on social media. It also matters because students will also start to depend on technology than reality and the people around them. Students are attracted to cellphones because they use social media to talk to people around them. They are also attracted to cellphones because of the people around them using them. This can negatively affect students as they can be cyberbullied and judged quite easily. It can also cause them to become addicted to cellphones and social media and rely on phones more than the people around them. Teenagers spend a lot of time on cellphones to pass time which can also cause them to become addicted as they have nothing better to do. They are also addicted to cellphones as they find it can distract them from the people and problems around them. This can cause negative effects such as poor eyesight, headaches, poor attention span and more. These can affect teenagers greatly as it can cause them to become distracted while in school or make them unable to get a job that they want in the future. Instead of focusing on studies they instead focus on what people think of their social media accounts and what people they follow are doing. These are only some points on why cellphones negatively affect students, Phones are useful but sometimes they can cause more problems than talking to people.
What must you achieve
(in this paragraph I am trying to show/prove/explain that)
- Students are negatively affected by cellphones
Information
(Key evidence/information you want to include)
- Why attracted
- Time spent on phones
- Effects that happen when overusing phones
Delufiy
(best paragraph structure to convey this is)
- Lawyer paragraph
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Cellphones have negative effects on students. This matters because it can affect their mental states while on social media. It also matters because students will also start to depend on technology than reality and the people around them. Students are attracted to cellphones because they use social media to talk to people around them. They are also attracted to cellphones because of the people around them using them. This can negatively affect students as they can be cyberbullied and judged quite easily. It can also cause them to become addicted to cellphones and social media and rely on phones more than the people around them. Teenagers spend a lot of time on cellphones to pass time which can also cause them to become addicted as they have nothing better to do. They are also addicted to cellphones as they find it can distract them from the people and problems around them. This can cause negative effects such as poor eyesight, headaches, poor attention span and more. These can affect teenagers greatly as it can cause them to become distracted while in school or make them unable to get a job that they want in the future. Instead of focusing on studies they instead focus on what people think of their social media accounts and what people they follow are doing. These are only some points on why cellphones negatively affect students, Phones are useful but sometimes they can cause more problems than talking to people.
hey Trisha,
ReplyDeleteWell done on your blog,
I like how you started off with your Plan then did a full paragraph,
I cant find anything helpful to do sorry,
Yours scensarly,
Liam White 10RN
Nice work Trisha. This blog post is full of good information and tells me a lot about all of the different negative effects that occur with teenagers being addicted to cellphones. Maybe next time you could cover some of the more positive effects caused by them. But anyways keep it up.
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